- Creativity 8.9 - Inheritance is written from Tenzin's point of view. It's an interesting take on his young years. There wasn't much that knocked me out of my seat, but it's still unique in its concept.
- Plot/Organization 8.6 - I completely understand the premise of the story here, which is the important first step. Bray knows what he's doing, and he has his story planned pretty well. The problem with the plot is the flow. The link between events sometimes confused me. Here we are practicing airbending. Then, we are looking at the ocean. Oh, there's Bumi! The one example that I remember the most clearly was when Tenzin leaves the diner, and Lin somehow appears, and they go for a stroll; I didn't get that. I understand that it's from Tenzin's point of view, but it's crucial to explain WHY things happen instead of just describing. Sometimes it's difficult to figure out what time of day it is or how long time lapses. The weighty descriptions cover the plot a bit. One way to improve the plot clarity is to focus not soley on Tenzin, but on the happenings of Republic City, his family, Air Temple Island, the sky bison, and Lin as well. Build a complex world around Tenzin instead of separating his complexities from it.
- Character Development 8.2 - The score doesn't reflect a lack of character development. Tenzin, the main character, and Aang develop immensely in the first few chapters. The problem lies within the portrayal of the two characters' development. In many cases they act "out of character." Tenzin constantly looks out over the ocean, Yue Bay, or Republic City in extremely deep thought, which is fine, but in some cases it goes overboard. I know Aang as a wise, optimistic, funny, and light-hearted guy, even when he was a kid. In Inheritance he is extremely serious and emotional all the time. I feel like they are always crying, hugging, or apologizing. These moments are fine, but if used too often they will lose their power. Character development is not easy to write, not at all. To accurately depict Aang and Tenzin, I suggest paying attention to their mannerisms and dialogue in episodes. The other character development lies within the relationship between Tenzin and Lin. To put it bluntly, it developed too quickly. It was unclear at what point in life they started "dating" or if they are really dating. In "Inheritance" Lin was soft, sweet, and caring. In reality, she is a metalbending tank and probably the most talented bender in Season 1 of Korra (not including Amon). It's perfectly fine to show her softer side, but just remember, she's Toph freaking Bei Fong's daughter! Lin is blunt, aggressive, and stubborn; she values bravery. Don't force romance just for the sake of romance. In real life, you can't force romance....many people try, but it won't work; fanon is the same way. There wasn't enough to justify Lin's crying and professing her love for Tenzin when she is 13 years old. I have ideas to improve this relationship, just message me :)