- General Critique - Erosion is based primarily on imagery, sensory detail expressed through language. Lines like "They sit there in pensive silence as the moon slowly rises above the calm waves, and a gentle breeze picks up" evoke a feeling of solitude in the surroundings. On the other hand, lines like "Her heart blooms in her chest to form a dull ache that explodes past the walls she has placed around it" really contrast Toph's inner feelings, how loud they are compared to the tranquility of the setting. Most one-shots, especially Fruipit's one-shots, are more creative in delivery than serial fanons. I like to think of one-shots as the "poetry of fanon," whereas fanons with chapters are like traditional novels. In this regard, Erosion lives up to its identity as a one-shot; it focuses more on beautiful writing and conveying emotion than concrete events.
- Reflection - My mental image of Toph is one of a badass earthbender who is as stubborn as her element. I think in most cases, this holds true. Erosion gives us a different side of Toph, one that isn't seen too much in the show. We get sentimental moments from her in only a few episodes, namely the Blind Bandit and The Runaway. This one-shot expands on some of the subtle character traits we see from Toph. I think one of the cool things about this story is the sensitive details. The usage of Toph makes this even better. Trapped in her pitch-black world, Toph detects the slightest movement, the slightest touch, and that makes this one-shot that much more meaningful. Its as if the most fragile breath explodes in her mind. As a result, the tender moments depicted are very passionate, even if there isn't much action.
- Score 4.4/5 - It's really hard for me to judge one-shots, especially ones that are so emotional and written on passion. Sometimes I relate to them, sometimes I don't. The score really doesn't mean anything, I kind of just chose a number. 4-5 It doesn't really make much of a difference XD The point is it's a creative work, a well-written story, and I admire the heartfelt nature of every word.