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Fanon Review: Xiaons: First War

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This review was conducted by the Fanon Review Squad and reflects our best judgment of writing and fanon authorship quality. Please don't take offense if the review wasn't positive. We always give advice!

Omashu Rocks here for another installment of FRS:The Omashu Scoop! Today's fanon: Xiaons: First War by Len Poles.

Authors' Plot: Xiaons there are more than a year. They are enemy number one Kazelians. One day a war breaks out, which is remembered as a War of Xiaons. Everything begins in Szczecin.

SCORES:

Plot/Storyline: Honestly, I'm not sure I could tell you what the specific plot is, despite the author providing one (see above). The fanon obviously revolves around a war of sometime that seems to take place in Poland (?) with not only Avatar characters but heroes from other series, namely Code Lyoko. Anyway, the entire thing seems to be nothing but an extremely confusing battle. 4.0
Organization: I've found multiple articles that each like main pages, First Xiaons War, Xiaons: First War, something about Maxteen which appears to be the fanon's alternative name(?) It is also hard to tell chapters apart from battles, seasons, or other pages. The format is also a boring script-layout, that really just adds to the mass-confusion. 3.0
Creativity: Now here I can actually give a good score. I've never seen a fanon that includes Code Lyoko characters and has battles as complex as this one. 9.1
Action: This is the first time I have ever said "Too much action!" The entire thing seems to be a battle inside a battle inside a battle. (battle-seption?) The fight scenes are incredibly confusing, poorly written, and repetitive. At least, I think it's repetitive; the whole thing's remarkably difficult to understand. 1.0
Interest Level: 0.9
Character Development: I'm not sure the characters develop too much, but this was certainly not the worst aspect. 3.5
Believability: Not at all. 2.0
General Writing: Coherent sentences were an extreme rarity. I had to read each scene at least twice to barely get the gist of what was happening. The grammar was incredibly poor, the English was broken, subjects and verbs did not agree, punctuation was misused, etc. 0.5

Average Score: 2.5
Note: All Scores Are Out Of Ten

What Len Poles does right:
If anything, this fanon is certainly creative. That is an aspect that Xiaons: First War does not lack at all. This is something for the author to be very proud of. He has a very colorful imagination.

What Len Poles could improve on:
I know the scores are disappointing, but if I told you what you wanted to hear, I wouldn't be helping you at all. I believe the most important motto of the FRS is We always give advice! That being the case, I strongly advise that you find multiple people on the wiki with the time and drive to act as an editor. I see you have Annawantimes, and that's great, but you cannot expect one person to be able to shove schoolwork, work-work, family, friends, and their own wiki matters aside to work only on your fanon. The grammar of this fanon in particular may need special attention as well. Perhaps you could even find a Polish translator… What I'm getting at is that if the fanon was clear and easy possible to understand, it would have a lot more readers.

Who does Xiaons: First War appeal to?
Like I said, the creativity is there. Once Len Poles is able to find a way to improve the grammar, it will be a good fanon. It has the potential with a creative plot, and it simply needs clarity.

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