Omashu Rocks here for another installment of FRS:The Omashu Scoop! Today's fanon isby and .
Authors' Plot: The Lifebenders is BlackMonkey and Suzon's upcoming fanon. It tells the story of an earthbending master named Toka. He is supposed to teach Avatar Yangchen how to Earthbend. However, he is extremely cocky and arrogant, so Lee decides to teach him a lesson. He destroys Toka's legs in hopes he will now realize he is not the best. Now, Toka has to adapt to being handicapped.
Plot/Storyline: The author's have done a brilliant job in creating an actual morale to the story, like an Aesop Fable. It's really well done. 9.4
Organization: The main page seems well organized, but I can't tell how well the authors have planned ahead given there's only one chapter. 9.3
Action: Well, the first chapter (which is all that's out) usually isn't the most action-packed, but that being said, there was some cool bending and in addition a description of a fight. 9.3
Interest Level: I'm very excited for the next chapter. There are a few reasons in particular that are keeping me wait, but I don't want to spoil it. (One pertains to Lee's character) 9.4
Character Development: There's only been one chapter, but again, it was really well done. I can tell what kind of character Lee and Toka are going to be. 9.2
Believability: No major problems here. 9.4
General Writing: I suppose this could improve, but only slightly. 9.2
Average Score: 9.3
Note: All Scores Are Out Of Ten
What BlackMonkey and Suzon do right:
I thought the settings and bending were well described, I could really see a picture. Also, the whole idea of there being a lesson at the center of this fanon is really neat. It makes for a great plot.
What Suzon and BlackMonkey could improve on:
Having only had the first chapter to judge on, this is hard to say. One thing I will suggest is that down the road, they include something much bigger than Toka or Lee, something HUGE.
Who does The Lifebenders appeal to? Anyone out there looking for a great plot can end their search now.