Omashu Rocks here for another installment of FRS:The Omashu Scoop! Today's fanon is User:AcerEvan/The Chronicles of Avatar: The Freedom Fighters}} by.
Authors' Plot: In 99 AG, the Hundred Year War raged on, and the Avatar was nowhere to be seen. Despite this, a little family managed to thrive peacefully without any indignation and torture. A pair of brothers, Jim and Jerry, made their way through life without the love and guidance of parents. Their father had perished in the war, and their mother had long been kidnapped by a Fire Nation soldier. Jim eventually stepped forward, gathering all of his fellow orphan children and instilling them with his strength and trust. They soon shared his ambition to end the war, without the help of the missing Avatar. And like the cycle of seasons, the cycle of the fighters began anew. SCORES:
Plot/Storyline: I like it; I think showing the tales of the freedom fighters is a really good idea especially when you go so far in depth like Acer does. 9.4
Organization: Acer has many unpublished chapters already planned out on his main page. It's clear that he thinks ahead. 9.4
Creativity: I have seen fanons about these Earth Kingdom vigilante groups before. 9.0
Action: Definitely needs more a lot more action, and some good quality action with pain and creativity. 8.6
Interest Level: I wasn't super excited about this fanon, but in reality it wasn't too much of a chore to read. 8.8
Character Development: Jim and Jerry's relationship develops nicely, but I suggest trying to get readers to care about other characters too. 8.9
Believability: Well, Jim and Jerry aren't the most believable of names, and some situations are just a tad unlikely. 8.9
General Writing: Much better than I expected, maybe thanks to the fanon's six editors. 9.4
Average Score: 9.0
Note: All Scores Are Out Of Ten
What Acer Indonesia does right:
As I was reading, I couldn't think of what it was, but there was something smart about this fanon. Now, I believe what I was thinking of is Acer's ability to create a story, in general. I knows how to include the basic elements that make a tale a legend. There's an interesting plot, some good twists, and even some poetic titles, etc.
What Acer Indonesia could improve on:
Like I said earlier, action needs improvement. That's a good thing to start with.
Who does Chronicles of Avatar: The Freedom Fighters appeal to? Users who want to read about a few trouble makers who looking for their destiny should love this fanon.