Before I post my new show, I need feedback so the first chapter is the best it can be so if you can please give feedback.
PS Please don't be rude.
In a small hut near the waters in the Northern Water tribe, one man and four woman sit. The man is young around 30 and is feeling the crushing pain of his wife’s hand.
“Just a few more pushes to go!”The oldest woman tells the wife, “ come on you’re almost done.” “AHHHH!” The wife is indignant to all because of the excruciating pain.
“Come on, do it for the baby.” The man tries to calm down his wife, but fails.
“That is easy for you to say! You are not the one having to do this!” The wife cries in pain.
“ Just on more push!”
With one last breath, the woman finally gives birth. It is a happy occasion, the wife and the husband have never had a child before.
“It’s a healthy baby girl!” the oldest woman exclaims to the happy couple.
“She’s beautiful,” the man says wiping a tear from his eye, “what should we call her?”
The wife, having now feeling no pain says,” I think we should call her Kanna, after your mother.”
“That is a wonderful name,” the old woman says.
“I wonder if sh-“the husband begins before being cut off.
A tribal elder suddenly runs into the hut,” I’m sorry to disturb you, but we just received word that the avatar has died, we have to take your baby and check, just in case.”
“Can’t I just spend a little more time with her?” the mother asks barely listening to the man.
“I’m sorry, but we have to check,” the man walked over and took Kanna, “this will only take a second little one.”
EDIT: First chapter is up.