here. I've finally gotten around to really delving into my own fanon writing, but as a result this review was late D:
Today, I'm looking atby . It's a sequel to Suki's Story, which confused me at first since I try not to look at the main page's plot synopsis when I'm reviewing...
- Mistakes/Grammar: 8.2 Commas oh my god. There were a handful of other mistakes, but the overdose on commas was most distracting...
- General Writing: 8.0 The writing has improved since the last fanon I reviewed of his, but it still just feels rather stiff to me. Some of the descriptions sound forced, but they're there and overall the writing is a lot more interesting than I felt it was in Suki's Story.
Writing Score: 8.1... B-
- Story: 7.3 I was largely really confused. There isn't too much to talk about, but I just found myself lost in multiple spots and re-reading.
- Characters/Character Development: 6.9 There really hasn't been any solid character development thus far. Most of the characters are canonical, but they just feel kind of robotic rather than really emotional.
- Genre (Action): 9.0 I loved a lot of the action scenes, though. It almost felt like they were written by something else: suddenly I just knew what was happening, and I could easily follow what Slash was trying to say with the action. Slash's Action writing is by far my favorite part of his fanons.
Content Score: 7.7... C+
Content Quality Categories
- Creativity: 5.9 Thus far, there hasn't been anything really creative. It's just kind of another story following team avatar with a mysterious outside force attacking, which I can't count how many times I've seen...
- Believability: 7.2 Ehhh... There was a fair amount of dialogue that I just didn't buy, as well as other parts. Does Aang really expect people to worry about his wedding when he was attacking by a mother hugging assassin? It seems... murrr.
Content Quality Score: 6.6... D
Overall Score: 7.5... C
My advice for Agent Slash: Write more. This has a lot of potential, but it's just kind of empty with what you've released so far. In the future, I'd recommend waiting until you feel like you have a solid, meaty story before signing it up for a review. But in the future, get into the characters a bit more. They're just kind of mediocre right now.
What sort of person would enjoy Into the Light? Anyone who is a fan of Slash's works, though I highly recommend you read at least "Suki's Story" first otherwise it will be extremely confusing...