Hey there, Sunset in the Mind's Eye by on behalf of the Fanon Review Squad.here, reviewing
Sunset in the Mind’s Eye is a one-shot that revolves around Jet and his unrequited love for Katara. It is a poetic piece that has a lot going for it, but a few problems did arise as I read, as well.
The Good: The poetic nature of this one-shot showcases Specialk’s writing ability very well. His description of both feelings and the world in which Jet finds himself are, in both cases, incredible. I found no flaw in either spelling or grammar. In terms of writing quality alone, this piece shines brightly.
The Bad: Unfortunately, the poetic nature of this piece also takes away from it. Being that it’s supposed to be Jet’s perspective, I felt like the style didn’t fit Jet as a character. I would’ve liked to have read it in his voice. As good as the use of language is here, it just doesn't quite feel like Jet speaking.
The Verdict – 8.0/10.0: This fanon has very good things going for it: the writing is superb, and the description is incredible. However, I had hoped that Jet’s character could’ve been seen more in the style, as opposed to him sounding out of character.