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Set in a world that bares resemblance to the time of the Ancient Egyptians, Egypt is divided in the four nations, with the great river Nile running through the country and this story. Three months before her coronation as Fire Lord, Princess Lostris finds herself suppressed by Lord Naja, Grand Vizier of the Fire Nation and her legal guardian until she comes to age. With Taita at her side, Lostris is forced to meet him head on if she wants to keep the throne. A clash of political power and the blood-given right to rule will determine the fate of the world. When the dark truth about her past is revealed, Lostris is forced to rediscover herself. Meeting friend and foe, trust and betrayal, peace and war, Lostris embarks on a journey towards destiny.
After reading this fanon, I must say that it is one of the most well written pieces I’ve ever read. Heiress of the Nile is an incredible fanon, even with only three chapters to its name thus far. Lady Lostris has struck gold with this one, and it seems that all the praise it has been given is well-deserved.
Story – 9.5: The Avatar world mixed with Ancient Egypt? I was skeptical at first, to be honest, but it has proved me wrong. The story that LL sets before us is one of immense creativity and amazing potential.
Action – 9.0: The action in the first chapter alone is enough to warrant this score, as LL describes it excellently. It is plentiful without being stifling, which is a hard line to walk.
Writing – 10.0: This is the first ten I’ve ever given (hopefully not the last), and I fully believe that she deserves it. Her writing, descriptions, grammar, and style are all perfect. I noticed one or two slip-ups, but I felt that they weren’t enough to detract from this score.
Creativity – 10.0: Another ten…damn…but once again, Heiress of the Nile deserves this. The story idea and its execution are so new and exciting that I cannot help but give it another perfect score.
Believability – 8.8: For the most part, this was very well done. There were, however, moments where I felt things moved a little too quickly or conveniently, but overall this was very good.
Character Development – 9.0: With only three chapters, I can’t exactly give this a ten, because there hasn’t been much time for development. By the same token, the development and characterizations that we do see are off-the-charts amazing!
Average Score: 9.4
Note: All scores are out of ten
Advice for Lady Lostris: Uh…um…geez this is tough. My advice: keep it up! You have a gift; use it. One thing I would say is that if you feel like a pivotal moment or plot device seems too convenient or is moving too quickly, take a step back and examine it or send it to an editor.
Who should read Heiress of the Nile? I highly recommend this fanon to everyone. I kid you not; everyone who considers themselves fanon readers should give this one a shot.