Hey there, Mageddon725 here, reviewing Fanon Review Squad.by on behalf of the
In this metropolis lives a Firebending boy called Fenn Miyakami who is cursed one night by a mysterious ‘demon.’ With no job and losing his money, he meets a street kid, Otto Tinchen, who takes him under his wing and into the dangerous world of underground fighting, illegal betting and triad meetings. Will Fenn’s curse ever be lifted? And who is the master behind the governing company Beyond? But mostly, what do these crazed demons want with the Republic?
Well, with only two chapters, I can’t really say much about this fanon. The concept seems innovative, and the story seems like it will flow well, but there is a distinct lack of material to go off of.
Story – 8.4: The idea of the death of the Avatar and demons is pretty interesting, but two chapters is not enough to adequately judge.
Action – 6.5: Not much action yet. There’s hardly any at all, actually.
Writing – 9.0: There are very few grammatical and spelling errors here, and the style is done very well.
Creativity – 9.0: Demons and an Avatar’s death have been covered in a few fanons, but this story is a rare find.
Believability – 7.5: The characters seem believable enough, but, once again, I haven’t seen enough to make a judgment call.
Character Development – 7.0: The second chapter (including the prologue) is actually the one that introduces the characters, and they seem to be created with care. However, there is no development really present.
Average Score: 7.9
Note: All scores are out of ten
Advice for Kyoshidude: Write more chapters. Seriously, I would recommend that you write more chapters before asking for another review, as most of the problems stemmed from there not being enough material.
Who should read Gods of War? Anyone who wants to read a fanon that covers centuries after Korra should give this one a look.