Hey there,here, reviewing by on behalf of the Fanon Review Squad.
Footsteps in the Dark closely mirrors the canonical TV Series. This fanon will be written from the limited third-person point of "view" of the character Toph Beifong. Any event that Toph Beifong couldn't have "seen" with her seismic sense or was not present for will not be mentioned in the canon.
A unique fanon, Footsteps stems directly from the mind of one of the most beloved characters from the original series. Toph’s Fanboy manages to capture how Toph feels about a given situation, even if it is a situation we’ve seen before.
Story – 9.2: The only reason this isn’t higher is because a lot of it is recycled material. However, the idea to make it from Toph’s perspective allows it to stand on its own.
Action – 9.4: The action well-described, and I could see every action through Toph’s eyes. A few times, I felt like the language was mildly repetitive, but nothing too distracting.
Writing – 9.3: I was impressed overall, but a few clunky sentences here and there were kind of off-putting.
Creativity – 9.7: Given that this is almost straight out of the episode, I can’t give this a ten. That being said, I’ve never seen a fanon like this one.
Believability – 10.0: Everything that Toph feels and thinks seems to come straight out of her character. Very well done.
Character Development – 9.5: I know that this is a fanon from Toph’s perspective, and she does develop as a character, with extra scenes not present in the show to aid in that. However, I would’ve liked to have at least seen a little more of the other characters in some way. I feel like they did little more than drive some of her inner musings at times.
Average Score: 9.5
Note: All scores are out of ten
Advice for Toph’s Fanboy: Just polish your writing a bit. Other than that, you have quite an awesome character study here. Good job.
Who should read Footsteps in the Dark? You can’t call yourself a fan of Toph and not read this one. If you’re not a Toph fan, read it anyway. You might change your mind.