Hey there,here, returning from a long, exam-related absence to review by and on behalf of the Fanon Review Squad. I feel that I should also note that my format for reviewing has been very slightly changed. Just sayin'.
Long before the Equalist Revolution, The Hundred Year War, Chin the Conqueror, or the Rise of Koh, a boy and a girl were born twins in the Northern Water Tribe. Little did their parents know that fate had played a terrible trick on them. The day the twins turn sixteen, the Order of the White Lotus confirms that both twins were born as the Avatar and that both the physical and spiritual worlds were unbalanced. Their leader, Yansu, decides that both Kembar and Kiama must master the four elements individually and then fight to the death while in the Avatar State to determine which should remain.
Fate’s Cold Hands is an original tale that features the intersecting stories of Kiama and Kembar. Unfortunately, with six relatively short chapters, it is hard to tell where the story is headed. On the plus side, Omashu and Slash have done an excellent job of making both of the divergent stories entertaining.
Story – 8.0: The premise is a tad unorthodox, but the storytelling is done well enough that it can be integrated well as a plot. I did like how the separate storylines both have things involved in them beyond the siblings’ Avatar training.
Action – 7.0: The action is a little more basic then I would’ve expected from two well-rounded authors like OR and Slash. I would suggest using better descriptions when detailing the fights. As it stands, they aren’t all that bad, but they could use improvement.
Writing – 9.3: Apart from a few minor hiccups in regards to grammar, the writing is very good. This element definitely showcases both OR and Slash’s abilities.
Creativity – 9.0: The premise of two Avatars at the same time is certainly unique, but a few elements of the sub-plots are a little stale.
Believability – 7.5: There were several points where I was kind of disappointed. The Order of the White Lotus is portrayed as heartlessly and barbarically forcing fate to choose between Kiama and Kembar, which I felt could’ve been expanded better. In addition, the siblings seem to hate their course at first, and we get an excellent glimpse of their closeness. However, in Chapter 2 it seems like they’ve fully accepted it and are treating it like a simple competition, as opposed to a future duel to the death.
Character Development – 7.0: As I mentioned before, in the first chapter, we see Kiama and Kembar as sister and brother, and it paints a pretty descriptive picture of their relationship. However, the later chapters just seem to forego this kind of development in favor of moving the sub-plots and their training along.
Average Score/Final Verdict: 8.0 – Omashu and Slash have an impressive start with this story, but it could use some polish in the action scenes, as well as some strong character development. They do make the sub-plots surrounding each sibling interesting and exciting, though, and that is praiseworthy.
Who should read Fate’s Cold Hands? Anyone looking for a unique pre-A:TLA fanon with an interesting plot should definitely check this one out.