Hey there,here, reviewing by on behalf of the Fanon Review Squad.
The story focuses on a 15-year-old girl named Akari, who has had her sister kidnapped by Equalists. In order to get closer to the Equalists, Akari disguises herself as a chi-blocker. Akari is also an Airbender, simply by the chance that her ancestor happened to be in the right place at the right time.
This fanon is certainly entertaining, with an Airbender who has a plausible backstory and her stint as a chi-blocker, and ATFF writes quite well. Apart from some relatively minor choppy grammar, I believe this fanon has potential.
Story – 8.9: A hidden Airbender who becomes an Equalist chi-blocker to save her sister? This is a great plotline that I look forward to reading.
Action – 8.5: The action is well-placed and well-written, but I did notice that the phrases/words used often became repetitive in description.
Writing – 9.0: The grammar and spelling of this fanon overall is technically good; the only problem is that, while it is correct, it is a tad choppy at times.
Creativity – 9.8: This is one of the most original fanon ideas I’ve seen. Period.
Believability – 8.6: Overall, the whole Airbender scenario is done very well, but a few conversations as well as some plot devices seem to me to be a tad convenient.
Character Development – 8.2: The main problem I had was the fact that we aren’t given much time or incentive to connect with Isra before she gets kidnapped, preventing any emotional response beyond what the author feeds us.
Average Score: 8.8
Note: All scores are out of ten
Advice for FireFerret: Just make sure that your action descriptors are changed up a bit and try to focus on making your grammar more fluid. Another thing would be author/reader connection; I’d suggest giving us something to really emotionally connect to the characters.
Who should read Chi-Blocker? Anyone who loves Equalist-related fanons should definitely read this one.