Hey there,here, reviewing by on behalf of the Fanon Review Squad.
Avatar: The Mistakes of the Avatar is all about how each Avatar makes a mistake that will be fixed by the next generation. It is divided into four fanons which are each divided into 3 books for a total of 12 books and 120 chapters. It covers the lives of Kyoshi, Roku, Aang, and Korra.
This fanon has potential, but out of the 120 chapters promised, two are currently published. The overarching theme is actually quite interesting, but so far the execution is a bit lax. The two chapters we do have are rather short. With that said, onto the numbers!
Story – 6.0: I give Godsrule props for the concept because it’s an awesome one, but two chapters do not a story make. As it is now, the story itself feels rushed.
Action – 4.0: There is very little of this yet, although I’d imagine that more chapters would bring more action. Unfortunately I can only review based on what I have in front of me.
Writing – 7.5: The grammar and spelling for the most part are correct, but it lacks certain flair. One thing GR could do better is in varying his conversation descriptors; he seems to love using the word “said” a lot. Try out new and different ways to get that same point across.
Creativity – 8.0: The idea is pretty creative, even though we’ve seen much of Aang and Korra’s story already. The problem lays the execution, or lack thereof, of such creativity.
Believability – 8.4: Apart from convenient-sounding conversations, this fanon was actually pretty believable.
Character Development – 5.0: Since the two chapters that exist cover Kyoshi, there aren’t any other preexisting characters to pull from. That being said, the characters that have appeared often have no discernible personality, and most of them appear to simply exist for the moment that they are referenced. There is no growth or development and no reason to root for these characters yet.
Average Score: 6.5
Note: All scores are out of ten
Advice for Godsrule: Most of the problems listed in this review can be improved on by simply writing more chapters and actually building a story. Also, try to spice up your writing; as of right now, it is rather bland.
Who should read Avatar: The Mistakes of the Avatar? Anyone who wants a look into the connections of the Avatars past and present should check this one out.