There are many great fanons on here, and you should all be proud of your work. (=
I decided to do a review on Aang’s fanon, Around the World (Again). It’s a very enjoyable fanon because, as any Avatar fan, would want to hear a continuation of the show we’ve all grown to love. We may be getting that with The Promise but we don’t have that right now, do we? We don’t get to talk to the author, do we? We don’t get to find out what happened to Zuko's mom, do we?….do we? Anyway, this fanon is a great continuation of the series after the war. What I especially like about it is the gaang goes around the world again (; and runs into some old friends, and enemies. Now, on with the review!!
~~If You Were Planning On Reading This Fanon, Then I Wouldn’t Read The Following, It Contains Some Spoilers~~
I really enjoyed the prolouge. Summary: The beginning and the introduction to this great fanon! What I Liked About This Chapter: Well, besides it being the beginning, it was verry descriptive and interesting to read. "The gang had officially started their adventure around the world (again)." Haha; great ending remark there! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Honestly, nothing at all! Aang wrote this after writing chapter 11, so, his writing was already improving!
I really enjoyed Chapter 1. Summary: The gaang goes to Ember Island and competes in a tournament. But, there is a tough team to beat: “Team Fire.” To make a long story short, the gaang ends up winning the tournament and earining the prize: 100 gold pieces and free tickets to a double play event at the Ember Island Theater! What I Liked About This Chapter: Something that stuck out was the reference to Ultimate. “'The Ultimate Waterbender?' I like that!" ~Katara. Very creative, Aang!! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Nothing much!! It was one of the longer chapters in this fanon, and you can tell the hard work put into it!! Great way to start off!!
I really enjoyed chapter 2. Summary: The gaang goes to the double play event at the Ember Island Theater, and sees two great plays: When Air Nomads Walked the Earth and Legend of Mei Lien. But seeing Air Nomads physically “alive” again, gets Aang in sort of a sad mood. What I Liked About This Chapter:References again!! The two people, Kala and Kyrie, were based off of Sky and Ultimate, which was also pretty creative!! (= What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Hmmm mabey a little more detail on the play, theater, etc. Otherwise, it was great!! I wish it was longer!! (=
I really enjoyed chapter 3. Summary: The gaang leaves Ember Island for the Western Air Temple. Aang is suffering from bad dreams, while Toph seems to be suffering in her own ways. What I Liked About This Chapter: I liked Aang’s dream factor of this chapter. It shows that Aang still thinks about what it would be like if he hadn’t left the Southern Air Temple. Very interesting to read!! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Well, for example: “Legend Of Mei Lien.” You’d only need to do “Legend of Mei Lien.” How I remember it: small word, small letters (ex: of, the, and..) unless of course it’s the beginning of a title! Just some constructive criticism for you Aang!! =D Also, some more linking. It makes it look more interesting…not that it didn’t look interesting already! It also provides more information, of course!
I really enjoyed chapter 4. Summary: The gaang goes to the Boiling Rock to pick up Mai, who was in the Fire Nation for a family reunion. While they’re there, though, they encounter trouble. What I Liked About This Chapter: 3 Words: THE. DAI. LI. A complete surprise, and interesting twist!! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Nothing!! You left a hook on the end, which makes a perfect ending for a great chapter!! (=
I really enjoyed chapter 5. Summary: Aang returns to the Fire Nation school he once attended in “The Headband.” He visits some old friends………but what will their reactions be when they find out he was the avatar?! What I Liked About This Chapter: This~ “Wow, sounds like Twinkle Toes has forgoten about the both of you.” Toph said from behind the building. “Hey what about you? He left you, too.” Sokka asked. “Yeah, but it seems like he replaces you two by those other two students.” Toph said. “Hey Sokka, Did you see the way that Shoji kid looked like? He looked just like you.” Katara said. “He kind of did. You’re right Katara. And that On ji kind of looks like you.” “No she didn’t. She didn’t look anything like me.” “But she did remind me of you.” Sokka said. It explains, in it’s own way, that Aang has grown close to Katara and Sokka, and seems to link to them anywhere. What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: I think I would have liked to see Shoji and On ji get to know Sokka and Katara more. Also, instead of “Hey Sokka, Did you see the way that Shoji kid looked like? He looked just like you.” Katara said. You could say something like: “Hey Sokka, Did you what that Shoji kid looked like? He looked just like you!” Katara exclaimed. Just a suggestion!! (= Other than that, great chapter!!
I really enjoyed chapter 6. Summary:Sokka and Suki visit Piandao, while Katara and the others go to Jang Hui. But, while they’re there, they encounter trouble. Things I Like About This Chapter: Again, the Dai Li!! You would have never expected it!! And, I liked how Aang (user (;) kept saying “the villian.” It keeps readers wondering who it is. What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Nothing, really. I liked how you combined two stories in one, Sokka and Katara, great job! (=
I really enjoyed chapter 7. Summary: The gaang returns to Ba Sing Se to see if anything’s wrong, according to one of Aang’s dreams. When they arrive, though, they find out something is wrong. What I Liked About This Chapter: Ok. I really liked this chapter. One of my favorites. (; Ok, a couple things: 1. The beginning: The mysterious villain watched in joy as Appa flew over the walls of Ba Sing Se, heading toward’s the gang’s house. A great way to start off the chapter, it leaves readers wondering: “Ok, who is this “villian”, already?!” Great writing there, Aang. This is a very exciting and suspenseful chapter, and, again, leaves a hook on the end. (= Things I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Nothing I want to chaange!! Great chapter!! (=
I really enjoyed chapter 8. Summary: An older enemy of the gaang, Long Feng they find out, begins his evil plan. What I Liked About This Chapter: A very exciting chapter!! Hama was a huge surprise!! And, a twist on how Zuko was missing. Very good chapter!! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Really, nothing. But in this line: “I have many more fighters up my sleeve. Hama.” Instead of saying it like that, you could say “I have many more fighters up my sleeve. In an instant they noticed someone eerie, someone who they haven't seen in a while, someone...evil. Hama." It adds a more dramatic effect. (= But, again haha, I really wouldn't chaange a thing!
I really enjoyed chapter 9. Summary: After Toph received a letter from her parents, she wonders whether she should go back home or not. As they arrive in Gaoling, she must make a decision. What I Liked About This Chapter: Very interesting to me, for some reason!! I would’ve never suspected Toph to leave!! I also thought it was pretty interesting that they went back to Earth Rumble!! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Well, of course I would wanted Toph to stay, but all the readers did!! I guess everything happens for a reason, right? (= So, other than that, I wouldn’t change a thing!!
I really enjoyed chapter 10. Summary: The gang arrive at the Northern Water Tribe to make plans to stop the upcoming war. They visit the Spirit Oasis and get brought into the Spirit World by an evil spirit. What I Liked About This Chapter: I really liked how the whole gang went into the Spirit World. It was a pretty interesting twist!! (= I also liked the ending!! Great!! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Hmmmm don’t take this the wrong way, but maybe the gang finding Zuko rather than Zuko coming back in this chapter. Just maybe because it would add a little more suspence. But other than that, great job!!
I really enjoyed chapter 11. Summary: Zuko explains his adventure he had while away from the gang. Things I Liked About This Chapter: Pretty interesting!! I liked how Azula was in this chapter!! I really wasn't expecting to really hear about her! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Maybe I would have taken out the whole Long Feng and Hama chasing Zuko part out, just because they could have just let him go and waited until they ran into the gang again to attack. (=
I really enjoyed chapter 12. Summary: Zuko continues his adventure, and begins looking for his mother. Things I Liked About This Chapter: I liked how Zuko found his mother!! So happy!! I had a feeling he finaly would. (= Their reunion was really great! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: I really wish Zuko and his mother could have spent more time with each other!! I mean, Zuko has been looking for his mother for years and years, I wish she would have decided to go with Zuko. She would have even got to meet Team Avatar! But, great chapter in my eyes. (=
I really enjoyed chapter 13. Summary: The gang goes to the Northern Air Temple to get some help from the mechanist. What I Liked About This Chapter: I really liked how Aang mentioned “cars" and “motorcycles.” I thought that was pretty creative to put that in there! (= What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: I wouldn’t change a thing!! A really good chapter, I thought! (=
I really enjoyed chapter 14. Summary: The gang goes to Treetop hideout to train for whatever Long Feng’s plan is, and for when he will attack again. What I Liked About This Chapter: Really descriptive!! Great writing with this!! I liked how all the tents, and the whole hideout pretty much, was colorful. (= I also liked how Aang added Jet in at the end. A very good and meaningful ending. What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Nothing!! A very good chapter, descriptive, ex: ... an annoyed Sokka answered, instead of just saying "Sokka said." or "Sokka answered." Great job with this!! (=
I really enjoyed chapter 15. Summary: Team Avatar decides to train up to fight Long Feng and his followers. They visit the Treetop Hideout to do so and later visit Omashu. They visit Bumi while there. What I Liked About This Chapter: This is the chapter that Aang thought was bad quality. "I'm pretty unhappy with this chapter. I feel it's very rushed and the writing wasn't up to standard, in my opinion. However, I know that the next one will be much better. Again, I apologize for the quality of this chapter." *raises an eyebrow* What in the world are you apologizing for?! In my eyes, this was another great chapter! The pacing was fine, there was really nothing wrong with it! But, anyway, I really liked the part "They were about to exit until, 'Aang!' called Bumi. The Avatar turned around. 'I hope you think like a mad genius!'" Haha; I liked that referance a lot! I also liked how the title, "One Step Closer", was a referance to how close the fanon is to being completed. What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Really nothing! I just wish Aang didn't have to kill Long Feng, but it seems like it's the only way. But, really good chapter! =D
I really enjoyed chapter 16. Summary: Team Avatar finally reaches Kyoshi Island...but Suki is having thoughts about leaving the gaang after seeing her old home again and thinking about her role in Team Avatar. What I Liked About This Chapter: I really liked how Aang captured Suki's feelings in this chapter. It seemed like there was a battle going on inside of Suki, and Sokka was the only one who could put an end to it. I also liked how this chapter kept me guessing. I was sure that Suki was going to leave, considering how fast Toph left. What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Nothing at all. It was an awesome chapter, and very descriptive!
I really enjoyed chapter 17. Summary: Team Avatar visits the Southern Air Temple, and, to their surprise, someone else visits, too. And when they get to the Southern Water Tribe, they have another surprise awaiting them. What I Liked About This Chapter: This was an awesome chapter. I was so happy when Toph came back! You're getting good at throwing unexpected things at us, Aang! The ending was great; a perfect cliffhanger, and great set-up for the battle to come. What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Again; nothing at all! It was a really great chapter, with very descriptive writing.
I really enjoyed chapter 18. Summary: The epic battle! Team Avatar vs. Long Feng and the Dai Li...who will win? What I Liked About This Chapter: The first thing I said when I was finished reading this chapter was..."wow." It was epic! I liked how Aang used "Meanwhile" to seperate different scenes with different characters, therefore creting different emotions. One minute you were happy that the battle was going so easily for Zuko, then the next second you were on the edge of your seat, worried about Katara! Easily one of the best chapters. ^_^ What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: Nothing at all!
I really enjoyed the epilogue. Summary: We get to see into the future, Tenzin and all. What I Liked About This Chapter: Well, I wasn't really expecting to go this far into the furture, but, this chapter turned out amazing. I loved the ending , how it sort of incorperated the title into it! What I Would Chaange About This Chapter: I think you know what I'm going to say. (;
AtWA was the first fanon (along with Eyes of Katara) that I started reading on this site. I think it's a very, very creative idea, especially that it may be continued (in a way) with Korra. Aang worked very hard on this fanon, and you can tell. His writing has improved so much. If you go back and read the first chapter, then read the last chapter right after, there's such an amazing improvement in describing, wording...everything! Aang, if you wanted to improve your writing by writing this fanon, you accomplished that goal. And all your hard work paid off!