Hey, guys. It's Acer, going on for good.
So, after a long vacation to the Land of Goodies and Dreamies, finally, doctor can cure me from Panditis! I wish the Ba Sing Se Times's Deputy Editor can also be cured from that... sickness.. But the point is, I'm back.
Long story short, my vacation from my bedroom had ended and now I'm back sitting in front of my PC, spying through the Recent Changes, keep lurking if there is any, any update from the fanon authors out there. And now, to celebrate the almost-barren competition in the Fanon Advertisement System; congratulation to ByBray for winning this intriguing contest! But hold the applauds. Guys, do you know who Bray is? Yeah, he's a new Fanon Writer that I believe, will give our Fanon Portal colorful. He is well-known with his Inheritance, and if you know, he's also just sent his request for Fanon Awards councilship!
Speaking about Fanon Awards, we are going to celebrate the most-waited annual through this Fanon Portal in this August! Yeah, it's such a long timespan from now, but I believe by creating your own fanon, editing through the Fanon Portal, cleaning up and getting involved in the Fanon user groups, you won't be bored at all. Trust me, when I enjoyed the Fourth Award, it seems I won't stay any longer in this wiki. But who knows? Now, I'm here reporting the Fanon Portal news. As ARG had said before in the FAQ column via Project: The White Lotus Sentinel, the admins will choose 5 councils and the councils will begin developing-phase in June. I wish we can expand our community-network by this great award, and I wish more authors can join the Portal following this award. Plus, let's celebrate the new Fanon Awards Council; AvatarRokusGhost, ByBray, Minnichi, Typhoonmaster, and Mageddon725! They, all of them had been chosen as the new Fanon Awards Council as of May 26, 2013! Expect more fun and interesting new ideas upon the new annual, and let's join the Awards by starting to write fanons!
So now, what's next? I have some cookies and sodas for everyone who celebrate their finishing-ceremony - let's just say congratulation to Omashu Rocks! He and his Political Animals had ended their journey in the Fanon Portal, but I believe OR will continue his adventurous live through the Fanon Portal with you, .
Well, if you don't know, I have several technical updates in the Fanon Portal - that currently, Fanonbenders are going to develop the abandoned page; the News and Updates central. That page comprises everything about news and updates of several fanon that if you know, shown via request. That page is a community news and updates, so a lot of great stories' updates could be seen via that page. Let me repeat that once more, SHOWN VIA REQUEST. Yeah, I'm talking to you, that you, yours fanon's news and updates can be seen on that page, which that equals with more popular fanon! :D You just need to put your fanon title in the Fanonbenders' talk page, notify one of us to add your fanon's news and updates' section to that page. It seems that page is barren, ya? But don' worry, if you contribute more from your own, we Fanonbenders would gladly appreciate your work and there will be no more barren page in the Fanon Portal ;-)
Wait. There is more. If you notice, there is a new feature in the whole Wika.com that evaluates to 5,000 wikis in worldwide; Wiki Activity Monitor or usually called WAM. It is a feature that indicates the Wiki’s health and vitality. WAM is a custom measurement developed by Wikia to capture a number of independent indicators into one overall index, like the Billboard or Parker score.
The WAM is calculated daily for the top 5,000 Wikis and includes an overall and vertical rank as well as a score from 0 to 100. The WAM rankings are sensitive to real-world events and change frequently, so be sure to check back regularly to see the latest trends. The point is, Avatar Wiki ranked top 40, and it consists of canon, film, and fanon mainspace. I said, FANON! Yeah, believe it or not, Avatar Wiki Fanon Portal is part of Avatar Wiki, which means we're part of a very BIG community! That's correct; our fanon contributions do give a very big impact to that rank! We are not barren, yet, guys. Just let our spirit back to ourselves, and let's write more fanon! It's sad to know that the only active fanon authors are Fruipit and AvatarMJC who update their own fanon constantly everyday. Come on, join us with writing and contest; Fruipit has a writing contest that you -must- give a shot. If you want our wiki stay in the #40, we should increase our activity--but it doesn't mean quantity over quality, of course. It's okay if writer's block caught you, but if you don't fix it, then who will?
Short story, now I'm off.. For good.
|| Fanon Review: Avatar: Neo Revolution by jtwin1|
For the first 2013 summer edition of the Ba Sing Se Times, I'll be evaluating Avatar: Neo Revolution by jtwin1 today! This story takes a darker spin on things but keeps the same spirit and values we all know from the Avatarverse. Definitely something you guys should check out while you're on break from school!
Avatar: Neo Revolution is set four generations after Avatar Korra, when a new waterbending Avatar is born. It is about the struggle of two boys, one of which is the Avatar, trying to restore balance to a vastly imbalanced world. With the help of their friends, they try to accomplish harmony and, before balance can start to be recovered, aim to discover which boy is the Avatar - while keeping under the radar of the Clandestines; a mysterious and powerful group set on destroying the Avatar and gaining an upper hand on the world's politics.
In an attempt to discover the truth and find refuge and support, they travel across the dangerous Wasteland to Haven, an accordingly named haven amidst the choas of a world in turmoil.
Will they succeed in restoring balance? Or will the Clandestines gain power and fulfill their aims? But, the question on everyone's minds is: Who is the Avatar?
Reading this fanon, anyone can see that this author has a great eye for detail. It really brings more life to the story and makes it go beyond a pile of text, something that you don't always see around the fanon portal. But without further ado:
- Plot - 8.8: The plot has a very solid setup, and I think the author's worked out everything nicely. The only issue I found was that a lot of things were presented kind of "separately" to the readers, like the entire prologue of the fanon. It's okay to keep some events as part of an intro, but in this case perhaps too many major events were left in "narrator" form. This makes the story less engaging and can make it come across more like a history lesson to readers if it stretches too long. In something like a prologue, it's critical to draw reader interest, so I would suggest introducing actual story characters a little sooner. Most importantly, to engage readers you should try to incorporate as much 'history' as possible into character interactions rather than explaining it separately. The characters can give us clues of the past based on what they say now, and it prevents the story from feeling slow if we hear it through them rather than via a narrator.
- Organization - 9.5: Almost nothing to say here. Everything was extremely, extremely clear. Only thing I might mention is again, the prologue. When you stick too many major events into the intro, things can come across vaguely. You could give some more insight on each Avatar that passed, or what motivated each organization to want to take control of the world and whatnot. The way it is now kind of lists off major things more casually than what's appropriate. Readers would want to hear a little more about the in-betweens that led to the current situation, and that could help make your fanon clearer overall.
- Creativity – 8.5: The ideas I came across were genius - the whole aspect of having two possible Avatar candidates, down to the kinds of weapons people have come up with to counter the Avatar State. I think the issue here comes mainly from a lack of elaboration, but it's mainly the antagonist side that I found somewhat stereotypical. We don't know much about them, and whenever they're mentioned it's either to take over the world or kill the Avatar. Their equipment and power seems to come to them a little too conveniently - but again, I'm pretty sure it's just because the author hasn't gotten to explaining how they got that far. With more elaboration of who the antagonists are and how they managed to grow so powerful, they'll just come across more as the unique, BA villains I know they are.
- Writing – 8.7 (x3): I'll have to say first that jtwin1 writes very well. The visual detail is some of the best I've seen around the fanon portal. However, there's one critique I'll elaborate on here that's as important as correct grammar/good detail: balance. In light of the author's desire to receive more feedback on this fanon, I believe balance alone may be the reason why there currently aren't as many readers as he'd like. This ties back to everything I said about the prologue; if things ever start feeling "slow" to a reader, it's hard to keep their interest enough to click on the next chapter. The one thing that I think would make the most difference for this fanon is if the author balances how much "story" there is versus how much "narration" there is. In my opinion, we should keep narration to a minimum. You'd be surprised how much background information doesn't have to be separated into a big paragraph. I notice there are a lot of lengthy 'character histories' that are elaborated on for quite a while before said characters actually begin doing anything. Right now I see more of a separation: big portions of history lessons followed by big portions of character interaction. You need more of a balance between them, so that it not only feels more natural but keeps a good pace as well. Instead of elaborating how a character looks like and then having them talk, for instance, you could combine it with their dialogue and actions. Something like "Rolling her sapphire eyes, she blew a messy lock of brown hair out of her face." It takes care of physical description without 'pausing' the story. And then for something like character history, you should combine facts with dialogue. Characters can often explain their own history a lot of the times, and it gives readers a better idea of who they are in addition to keeping things lively. So overall I think the writing is great, but it has a lot of 'pauses' when elaborating on background information. The information itself is crucial, but the presentation needs to keep a steady pace in order to retain reader interest.
- Character Development - 8.6 (x2): The protagonists are very nicely elaborated, so not much to say there. Deductions here come from what I think is a slight neglect for the same detail when it comes to antagonists and minor characters. I believe it would help to give readers a look on the antagonist side every once in a while, something to remind them that those people don't exist only to be evil and cause trouble. They have their own ambitions, and every antagonist is a protagonist in his own world, so we have to see what makes them believe their actions are right as well. The better we can understand both sides of the story, the more meaningful and complete the story becomes. So I say the Clandestines and their whole system could definitely use more detail, but overall the character development in this story is admirable.
- Action - 9.0: First of all, thank you - Oh my goodness, THANK YOU for being so visual about your attacks and actually showing me what element-bending looks like! jtwin1 covers everything, from the nature of each attack to the movements associated with them. I have nothing but praise for how he captures the visual elements of battle. The one deduction here comes from again, the balance issue - which seems to be the central area of improvement that branches to multiple categories. During the fights in this story, there are certain things I feel kind of slowed down the pace, particularly the dialogue. There are certain things characters don't need to say, such as their motives for everything. It could come across as a little cliche, for instance, if the evil-doers stop every once in while just to express how much they love bullying little kids and how they're going to make someone pay. In most real-life fights there isn't much time to stand around and mock someone, and you have to remember how fast things are happening. I would say the "commentary" during fights in this story are a little too frequent and last too long; the dialogue should reflect more the ongoing nature of the battle, and not make it sound like it's pausing for people to talk. Most of the time you can capture the same feelings without dialogue; try incorporating emotions into the actions themselves, or describing the expressions that hint how someone feels inside.
- Believability – 8.8: Only tying back to what I said earlier. I can see all of this happening, but it can sound a little unrealistic if the author doesn't elaborate on exactly *how* they happened. I understand that the Clandestines are very powerful, but it wasn't explained much how they could pull it off, only that they became too much for the Avatar. There isn't a sense of the "hard work" it takes for people with evil ambitions to reach their goals; I want to see more of a sense of struggle and difficulty for the Clandestines to rise to power, as it was surely not easy for them to become a threat to the Avatar as they did. Other than that, I think everything works for me.
Overall Score: 8.79
My advice for jtwin1: Main thing you should do is probably pick up the pace of your story. There isn't that much to add, just try incorporating things more into the characters' point of view rather than the reader's. Aside from that, great job!
Who should read Avatar: Neo Revolution? If you liked the show, you'll probably wanna check this out too.
Hey there, Mageddon725 here, reviewing My Imago by Kyoshidude on behalf of the Fanon Review Squad.
Lo and Li are twins sisters, and share a special connection. My Imago is a collection of one-shots based on many different viewpoints that explores the sister's connection. Throughout the collection, the sisters' ideals of love, family, and sacrifice are tested and perhaps, after a lifetime of turmoil, the two will become smoothened.
Though this is a fanon of one-shots, they each are a smaller part of a larger story. My Imago is quite a beautiful tale about two minor characters, and it accomplishes this well, despite some spelling and grammar issues. A note: For this fanon review, I have removed the action category, seeing as it has none.
Story – 8.0: The backstory of Lo and Li has never really been explored in and of itself, and this fanon does an excellent job. My complaint is that these one-shots are kind of sitting on the fence. By that I mean that they are incredibly interconnected, but not quite enough to make a coherent plot between them. Thus, this fanon sits in a state of limbo.
Writing – 8.6: The writing is done very well, something Kyoshidude should be proud of. However, the way he has chosen to write the dialogue, especially in the last two one-shots, is clunky and hard to follow. In addition, the vocabulary used in My Imago is sometimes extensive, and it ultimately takes away from the story when someone who reads it has to look up words (Yes, I had to do this once or twice; it brought shame upon my house).
Creativity – 10.0: I’m afraid that I can find nothing to criticize here. One-shots about minor characters that are hardly ever addressed in fanon make for a creative story.
Believability – 9.0: Though we know very little about Lo and Li canon-wise, I feel like this was a fairly good representation of what they might have gone through.
Character Development – 9.3: It starts out a little stiff, but as this series of one-shots goes on, I can see Lo and Li growing individually, as well as together, into the characters that we see in the original series.
Average Score/Final Verdict: 9.0 – My Imago is a very well written character study of Lo and Li, and the emotion showcased within is Kyoshidude’s strong point. Although it suffers from a few writing quirks and the whole limbo thing I mentioned, it is a pretty strong fanon in its own right.
Who should read My Imago? Anyone looking for an emotional character study should definitely read this.
Some of you might be aware of the new group-fanon project floating around the wiki called “Parallel”. This is an awesome fanon featuring seven well-known fanon authors: PreservationsWings, ByBray, TechFilmer, Fruipit, The lucky mango, Henryjh98 and myself. Working with a group of authors on one story (as you can well imagine) isn’t easy work, but it is a fun and rewarding experience, that I am sure glad I can be a part of!
Parallel features a band of seven separate individuals who find themselves smack dab in the center of an all-out war in Republic City. The story takes place just fifteen years after the end of the Legend of Korra, and it is told through a different point of view for every individual character. When their home is in chaos and Avatar Korra is nowhere to be found, these seven ordinary individuals, with their own various backstories and abilities, each face the beginning of the end before ultimately being drawn together to form an underground team against the new evil that has emerged to threaten everything. Under the leadership of the United Republic’s best detective, five formerly troubled teens are the only hope the UN has to take back their city and perhaps even save the world.
So far Parallel has faced many tribulations that has stalled our writing, whether it be the trade out of inactive writers, the lack of communication between some authors, the busy schedules butting in, and of course the effects bled onto us after (what I can only refer to as) a brutal betrayal and a wicked dive into mania between two users in our own group’s family. Still, past all of the struggles, Parallel has begun to blossom! The publication is still a ways away from being released to everyone here, but when it finally goes public, I guarantee that it will be well worth the wait. If you have not subscribed yet, well don’t worry, you still have time, but this is definitely not a series that you’ll want to miss! With our team finishing off with school and other various setbacks, soon Parallel will be taking off and brought into the limelight, hopefully to become a fan favorite among the fanon-lovers!
In the end (as it is with all writers and their fanons) imagination and endurance are the two keys to success and no matter what, you can never allow naysayers to keep you from enjoying the thing you love---if you’re too afraid to try something new, you won’t ever do anything fun. You got to go put yourself out there and not hold back just because you’re afraid that one person might mock you for it. In hindsight, tons more will actually love the things that you create and one good comment is worth a hundred cruel and empty words where the only purpose is to bring you down. Here in a family like my Parallel group, we don’t have to worry about people looking down on our achievements; we’re connected in a bigger project that plunge or prevail will be our own good memories just getting to create. As long as we are confident in our work and enjoy what we’re doing, then it’s all worth it in the end. With any author, either in a group or as an individual, just keep writing, drawing, and living on whatever it is that you think is fun. Never back down and don’t listen to the naysayers around you. In the end, you’ll be the one with all of the happy memories, while they’re left alone with only the empty words.
With that, please enjoy this sneak preview of our group-fanon, Parallel…
- Republic City, the grand haven for equality, or so it has been called by the rest of the world. A nationwide prosperity has engulfed the planet ever since Avatar Korra and her friends brought down the Equalists, and rendered a much needed balance between this world and the land of the spirits. For fifteen years this city has longed through a really boring era of peace, happiness, and safety.
- “Help! Police! I’ve been robbed!”
- Well---not too much peace and safety...
- One woman’s shrill cries echo throughout the distant streets as a mugger runs through the alleys with her snatched handbag and a handful of her hard-earned yuans. He runs his hardest through the brick maze of buildings, his feet pounding and blood pumping; he takes a sharp turn as he runs and then scales a fence twice his own height. The mugger is swift, agile, but smart? No, he isn’t very smart at all. If this robber were a smart criminal, a true con artist and a master at larceny, then he would obviously realize that one more misplaced turn and he would run head first into a blockade of Metalbending officers.
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- He just made the turn.
- Now everyone can only sit back and watch as nature takes its rightful course...
Not a lot to go on, yeah… but I don’t want to give away anything too exciting just quite yet. XD
Hello, my Avatar-obsessed acquaintances! Fruipit, back (yes, again) to chat about the Fanon Fact Finders' Users' Choice Interview.
Okay, last WLS issue, I put up a small article and a poll asking users which fanon they would like us to interview. Now, this may seem like a stupid question (really, Fruipit? The Fact Finders, an interviewing usergroup, wants to interview someone? No!), but bear with me. I promise I'll stop being sarcastic.
A while ago, Master Ratava came up with the idea that once a year, all the members of the Fact Finders would get together and interview one author on their story. This was a really long time ago, and its almost sad that he isn't here to see us try it. Obviously, by my previous statement, the interview never occurred, and it's been sitting down the bottom of our group page since he added it. Recently, it was suggested that we try it now while the usergroup is so quiet (honestly, it's like going to the beach. In the middle of winter. In Antarctica). This way, we have time to test a few things out (such as the best method for getting the community involved, how much time it takes, all that jazz), and there is no-one around to laugh at us if we fall through the ice (figuratively speaking, of course).
Now, with the actual author we might interview - it's up to you guys to pick them. We, the members of the Fact Finders, need you to go over to the latest WLS Issue and scroll down to the bottom. There is a poll there with four fanon options. We need you to vote for either ARG's latest story, DSV, Kyoshidude's Kyoshi Chronicles, Meg's Moon Drops or Minn's Dai Li Agents. Whichever story gets the most votes will be interviewed by all members of the Fact Finders, get a special blog post about it, and a nifty userbox commending them!
The whole point of this is to give us something to do, and get a bit more notice out there about the Fact Finders - not to mention hopefully giving another author a little more attention. Has anyone else noticed that the interviews are less popular than reviews? This is very much a trial as to how involved we can get you guys, and whether or not we actually help people discover a few of the less well-known, or ignored stories. I know that I really didn't want to read SHiE, purely because it was an OC story - that is, until I read it in about three hours during a lecture for an interview.
I have read all of these stories, and I have to say that each and every one of them deserves their time in the spotlight. Unfortunately, it's not up to me to choose, so if you want to delve even deeper into the backstory, the influences and inspirations, heck, even just the nonsense ramblings of your favourite story, go over and vote now!