Sorry, I've just been so busy and my mom doesn't want me on the computer. You should just finish it, I think, so we can get it out as soon as possible. But make sure that in this chapter, Hikaze gets the note that he will be switched to the Southern Air Temple in the third chapter. Sorry again!
Well, this is what I though. I changed it form window to trapdoor, because window is violent, but he is going to be accidentally knocked out the window. Then it'll switch to Hikaze leaving and arriving at the South Temple. Then it'll go back and Kyfu'll be in the Master State, levitating outside the window. Either that, or he grabbed onto a rocky ledge. My stupid iPad deleted some of it, though, so we need to rewrite a bit.
well maybe its not a window but rather a natural opening in the room with no glass, i just didn't know how to describe it. I guess is like a open cavern. I was hoping maybe to include Kyfu holding on the ledge and then he slips falls past the fog, and then comes up in a air sheild while in the master state. end chapter
but Gyatso knows that Kyfu will enter the master state. How about kyfu falls but is hanging off a cliff, then Gyatso comes to help him because he never went into the master state. Kyfu then remembers being told that right now he can only enter it during survival situations, turns away from Gyatso and lets go. Gyatso is in shock only to find Kyfu come up in an Air Shield in full master state awesomeness
Ok, that's sounds good. I'll see if I can write the Hilaze part tonight. We really need the chapter to sound intense, just like the prologue, if we want any chance of wining the fanon awards, and get more subscribers
Also I will be out of town on vacation from the 20-24, so Chapter 4 is up to you. I'll be here tomorrow to discuss what should happen in chapter 4.
This is what I thnk should happen.
Start with Hikaze reaching the Air temple, try to tie in a small romantic moment when he says goodbye to Yoi. Gyatso greets them, and escorts Hikaze to the elders. The elders explain what will happen to him while he is here, and when he can go back. He asks a question about the Avatar, but the elders ignore him.
TRANSITION: Kyfu wakes up in his room(the room he once shared with Aang), with Gyatso sitting on the edge of his bed. They have a discussion about how to go into the master state at will. He needs to look deep inside himself, and face his inner conflicts before he is able to contorl the master state.
TRANSITION: During the night Hikaze wakes up, to find a messenger hawk at the window. He sends Sozin a message, saying he has made contact at the southern air temple. He says that he has reason to believe the avatar is there, but he will need time to confirm.
TRANSITION: Kyfu wakes up in the night, think about what Gyatso said. He then goes and sits on his floor mat, and meditates. END
What do you think? I know it was alot for one message.
Sup, I'm still on vacation but decided to check in and see how everyone is doing on the wiki. How's chapter 4 coming along? No rush if you haven't started, I'm just board. It has rained today so I didn't do much. How are you doing :)
Oh congrats on becoming a rollback :) You deserve it.
I still have a ways to go before I'll apply to be omin a rollback. I need toake some more qualitative edits and do some more anti-vandalism work :)
Wow, I don't start school til sept 4, then I'll be limited to weekends as well. It's ok if you don't get much work done on the chapter I totally understand. Btw I hope burnin air hasn't got in the way of the sole woodbender.
When school starts my goal is to write at least one chapter every 2 weeks, unless we get a lot of free time and just can't stop writing :P
Good luck tomorrow with your first day I'd school :)
Just wanted to check in and let you know that I'm back from vacation now. Hope school is treating you well :). Btw if you want I was thinking about how to write our chapters more efficiently, I had an idea. Maybe I could write a rough of the chapter and then we can refine it together. That way we would get the chapters out quicker since I have a light schedule this school year (let's hope it stays that way :) So if you want I can write the chapter 4, that way you have less stress.
I was wondering if maybe this weekend we could work on writing the next chapter of Buring Air togeather. This way we can include both of our ideas, since I've been mainly writing the past few chapters. And honestly, I don't know where to go with the next chapters :P