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Kuzonkid7

You can read a test run in my userspace. Please do, and make sure your okay with it.

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12:53, July 27, 2012

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  HammerOfThor

  I will have a look.

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  13:12, July 27, 2012

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  HammerOfThor

  I had a read, and I think you could do with making it a bit longer. Some of the sentences don't really make sense on their own, and could do with some description.

  If it is being read by someone who hasn't read the fanon before, it wouldn't make a lot of sense, and this should be who you are writing for. I would suggest expanding what you have to make it more accessible for people unfamiliar with what you are writing about.

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  12:36, July 28, 2012

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  Kuzonkid7

  10-4 I'll make it better 4 more days left.

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  12:46, July 28, 2012

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  Kuzonkid7

  Is it better now I'm still not done, mind you.

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  13:21, July 28, 2012

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  HammerOfThor

  I still think it could do with being longer. It is rather hard to read because there are so many short sentences, and a lot of them wouldn't make sense to someone who hasn't read the fanon.

  Oh, and the Equalists name is John not Joe ;)

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  18:55, July 29, 2012

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