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Swampbender55

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  • Hi there!

    Okay, first of all, you wrote a very good chapter. We didn't really find many spelling or grammar errors, however there was a minor grammatical error that kept popping up. When you finish a sentence of dialogue and the line continues, you don't use a period, but a comma. Compare:

    Correct: "There is the bathroom," Sokka said.
    Incorrect: "There is the bathroom." Sokka said.

    Unless it is a complete idea, and the actions of the speaker do not follow the words, you use a comma. If they are different, you use a period. Compare:

    Correct: "There is the bathroom." Sokka glanced in another direction, his finger following his gaze.
    Incorrect: "There is the bathroom," Sokka glanced in another direction, his finger following his gaze.

    That was the only grammatical error. We had difficulty establishing who the introduced character was because it felt more like you were relating a chain of events. There was little description, bother inter- and intra-personal, which made your story a little harder to read. There wasn't a lot to draw in a reader who had not read from the beginning. This isn't always a bad thing—sometimes you need calmer chapters—however it is hard to draw in *new* readers when something like this occurs. Really, though, your characterisation of the established characters was lovely :)

    I hope this helped a little. The rest of your writing was fine, it was just these little things :)

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  • Hi, Swampbender55. File:OPTTWO_zpsaaead6f4.jpg you uploaded to our database does not specify its source or licensing.

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  • So, for the shadows of equality cover art, yeah, I've been able to make these... SO sorry it took so long. School was a bitch(as usual) and, if you have anything, any suggestions, just speak out. These are what I've come up with.... SO, yeah, feel free to suggest, and if you're satisfied, then, okay :)

    The main image prototypes:this  and this

    and for chapter cards this




    So whaddaya say?

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    • Oh, sure...I can. Maybe you can just message me about future chapter titles or something

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    • Thanks. Sorry about the confusion. I heard about the illustrators through the Ba Sing Se times and I was just really excited to try it.

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  • Hey Swampbender, I see you have replied on the Haiku Battle forum discussion, I have a new wiki called the haiku bender wiki, a wiki for avatar and poetry.

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  • Hey, Swampy :3 (I won't call you that again, sorry -_-)

    I was just wondering what the title of the new chapter is? It wasn't included in the email.

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  • Hi there Swampbender55. So, sorry, a little bit of delay there, but the main page of your new fanon is up. Of course, you can make any and all changes as you see fit.

    Now, there's a bit of an issue - I couldn't publish the first chapter that you sent me because, stemming from irritating computer issues I'm having right now, I'm unable to open Word Documents. I would ask you to send me the content of the first chapter in the e-mail itself, but another thing is that I'm going to be inactive for a couple weeks starting tonight and I won't be available to publish any chapters during that time. It would be better, for the time being, if you could ask another user on here to publish any fanon chapters; I'm sure anyone you ask would be willing to help. =)

    I'm really sorry for this inconvenience.

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  • Is that fanon article you just released - is that a one-shot or a chapter tied to larger story? If the latter, it would be preferred if you made a story page.

    If you're curious -I'm asking for the purposes of categorizing the work.

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    • It's a one-shot. Sorry for the confusion. This is the first Fanon story page I've done myself.

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    • Okay, that's fine - just was checking in. Don't worry, in Roku's words, it gets easier. ^^

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  • I see it was your birthday on cinco de mayo :D Happy belated birthday!

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    • Thanks. It's funny my name is Spanish and I was born on Cinco de Mayo. I was named after my dad and neither of us are Hispanic. Creepy coincidence.

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    • Very interesting....hehe well cinco de mayo is a happy day, so that's good :D hoping you're happy with your name :3

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  • Happy Birthday, Swampbender, and congrats on the Lucky Silver.

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  • Here it is. So sorry for the incredible lateness...but I finally got it done. Hope you find it satisfactory.

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    • Thanks so much. It was worth the wait.

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    • Hey, I just wanted to thank you again for doing the review. On a side note I wanted to ask you something. In your review you said you saw a few cliches. I know I spotted at least six myself, but could you please clarify on which ones you noticed? I want my next Fanfic to be much better and avoid some of the problems this one had.

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