Earth Kingdom box This is a page archive.

Please do not add or remove any content from it. (22,200 bytes)

Avatar: Advent of Earth

  • Avatar: Advent of Earth is a wonderful fanon written beautifully by TheFacelessOne. I was immediately drawn into the story simply by the sheer magnitude of the idea. And I was not disappointed, I've always wondered what it would be like if our world mixed with the Avatar world, and this fanon does an unbelievable job blending the two together, literally xD. There's also some hilarious teen/sarcastic dialogue which I thought was a high point. If you read this little rant and don't read Advent of Earth, I will find you and strap you to a rocketship on course for a wormhole in outer space Ty Mako-chao3 Nirvana 21:07, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Wow. Just wanted to say, wow. TheFacelessOne has a unique style of writing that paints the picture of his story extremely well, and you really can easily relate with the characters. Even in a modern setting, he can still make it seem like you are in the world of Avatar. FacelessOne knows exactly how our world and the world of Avatar would mix and mingle, how we would react to each other, and that is what an author needs to know if he wants to write a story like A:AoE. All in all, 5/5: A job well done. :) -  Wings wallcontribs 18:33, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'd have to say this is a great fanon to read. I feel that TheFacelessOne has done a good job creating believable, three dimensional characters that can be related to. I especially like TheFacelessOne's take on the continuation of the modernizing trend between the original series and LoK. I really don't get the weird spirit repeating the number twelve though, but it's a relatively minor scratch on the paint job of the story as a whole.

TheLoKnessmonster Sokka-sprite 23:02, January 5, 2013 (UTC)

  • I must say that this fanon has me intrigued. The idea of the Avatar never being reborn has got me hooked. I loved the reanimation scene. The concept of her body perfectly the way it was made me think it was a good way of explaining that something was up. But I do have some things to wonder about. Now I get and like that the world has changed with technology and the disappearance of the Avatar. I think some of the character development could use some work; particularly for Chen's sister as it seems to change from the beginning where she was sadistic and aggressive to protective of the same brother she beat up. Without explanation, it seems out of place. Now onto the big event. While I like how creative the idea of parallel universes with one being our earth and the other being the Avatar world. Given that we know they use Chinese in writing; it doesn't make sense that the people in Avatar could speak English instead of Chinese. If this happened in China, it would be interesting given the difference of governments. In all; I'm hooked! But i would like to see some work on it; character development of the sister; and the language difference

- The Snowbold (3:58 pm, January 5, 2013)

Avatar: The Mistakes of the Avatar

  • This fanon has a lot of potential but, with only two chapters released, it is kind of hard to see how great it could eventully be. The two chapters were fast-paced with Kyoshi already about to start learning firebending. Also, the chapters are really really short and a lot more detail should be provided to make this a great fanon. A few minor spelling and gramming errors harldy distract the reader, however. RuleroftheBisons97(Fanon) 23:43, January 23, 2013 (UTC)RuleroftheBisons97
  • Avatar: Mistakes of the Avatar is an amibitious fanon by Godsrule. I've never seen someone focus on this subject yet, so it's really creative. One of the underlying themes of the show is how each Avatar makes mistakes. In this fanon, the author fleshes out those mistakes and portrays the history as a whole. 120 chapters planned.....*Ty blinks* there is a Saga in the midst Ty Mako-chao3 Nirvana 19:18, January 24, 2013 (UTC)
  • This fanon is a first! I mean, who focuses on the mistakes of the Avatar?! A few fixes here and there, and this fanon might be the next big thing! So, read it! -  Wings wallcontribs 13:50, February 4, 2013 (UTC)

The Lost Scrolls

  • I think the idea for this fanon was very creative. It brought a whole new element into the world of Avatar, one that provides a lot of mystery and suspense. We get to meet new characters, revisit old ones, and spend time with the ones we've grown to love. However, this story can improve a lot on several things. First, many of the sentences are short and choppy. An editor could definitely help with this. Secondly, there isn't really any emotion in the story. Some emotion and thoughts of the characters while they battle or talk to each other could really make this story well-rounded and more exciting. I'm mainly talking about the first many chapters. As the story progresses, the chapters do get better and stronger with displaying emotion and complex sentences. Overall this is a really interesting story. The lucky mango 00:38, February 5, 2013 (UTC)
  • I previously had not heard of this fanon, but after reading it, I've noticed how creative it is! I love the fanon idea, you get lots of suspense, and spend it all with our favorite characters. But, the chapters could take a little fixing up. The sentences are choppy, short, and sometimes (for me, at least) got confusing. Not enough emotion, either. Really, just take more time, and you'll go far. As a great author once said (Okay, it's obviously Brandon Sanderson), "Writing is about saying as much about a story as possible." -  Wings wallcontribs 14:05, February 7, 2013 (UTC)
  • Just as Wings and Mango said, the sentence structure is very choppy, and the story lacks the strong emotional aspect in some areas. As the chapters continue, they become well-written, and these issues become less prevalent. This story, albeit having flaws in multiple places, has a wonderful plot line as well. It really brought new light to the original Team Avatar, and a suspenseful feel to each occurrence. There are a plentiful of improvements that could have been edited in, but overall, this story is quite compelling. My favorite writer, known as Mike DiMartino, once wrote, "I want to find out why it is we need those stories as much as we do and what we can do as consumers and creators of stories to seek out and tell better ones. We need stories that matter. Stories that help us and the world evolve." Keep on writing, and you'll learn to tell great stories, and produce magnificent works. -ByBray (Parallel β™‹ Inheritance) Tenzin-chao1 23:20, February 16, 2013 (UTC)


  • Inheritance is aΒ pretty unique fanon about Tenzin and his growing up. It's an original and interesting idea. I read the chapters quickly and eagerly. There was a lot of character development. I enjoyed the relationships; they were very realistic and relatable. However at times I felt that the characters didn't show enough emotion and sometimes the plot went a little too slow. Overall a great fanon to check out! ---The lucky mango 20:04, February 27, 2013 (UTC)
  • Ever since that first moment I met ByBray, read Inheritance, and started helping out with the project as his editor, I knew that ByBray could bring this fanon to fame. As his editor, I know he puts work into his writing, and I know that as he's learning more about how the wiki goes 'round, he's getting one step closer to being a renowned author. Congrats, Bray! -  Wings wallcontribs 13:13, March 2, 2013 (UTC)
  • Inheritance is beautiful in description and poetic in approach. Bray paints beautiful scenes and elves deep into the mind and emotion of the main character, Tenzin. I was astounded by the quality of writing in this fanon. There is something very relatable in Inheritance, perhaps the problems of growing up that everyone faces. Tenzin holds the weight of the world on his shoulders; so, I can't relate to that, but the little things, the subtle things like lonliness and uncertainty are things we've all experienced. Truly an impressive fanon. Ty Mako-chao3 Nirvana 03:13, March 21, 2013 (UTC)
  • Inheritance. Spirits, when you say the name, it makes your heart beat just a fraction faster, doesn't it? Too right, may I add. This has to be one of the most personal, awe-inspiring fanfics I've read. No, it's more than just a fanfic - that denotes some aspect that is poor in quality or lacking of originality. Inheritance is neither. Granted, you miss out on other characters, but this story isn't about them. This story is about the relationship of Tenzin and Aang, and ByBray writes it perfectly. Impeccably. Fantastically. From the flowing description to the engaging dialogue, everything about this story has a purpose, and everything about this story helps shape it to be bigger and better than I ever thought it could be. I love this story. I do, and anyone who perhaps has never read a fanfic before should start with this because it is heartfelt and honest. A brilliant story (first story, too) from an absolutely amazing writer; I would definitely recommend this to anyone who reads ATLA fanfic. Or anyone who enjoys a good story. Frui (🌹 β€’ 🐝 β€’ 🐝🐝) 07:20, March 29, 2013 (UTC)

A Broken Cycle

  • After a quick peek at WikiGeek`s fanon, right away, two things popped to mind. First of all, you have an interesting idea, if not generic. However, with only a few chapters released, I can see a lot of improvement that can take pace. You seem to write without editing, leaving a quick, short and sometimes confusing chapter. My advice (which I have been told a lot by my editor) is to take your time. Fill up those sentences with description! Good luck. -  Wings wallcontribs 13:20, April 1, 2013 (UTC)
  • I agree with Mr. Flyboy. Another thing to add is brush up on grammar. The grammar is to say the least, (no offense) terrible. Also you switch tenses sometimes. Try not to do that and brush up on how to mark quotes and punctuation related to that and you should do great! Srijay K β€’ TechFilmer 14:44, April 2, 2013 (UTC)
  • The chapters are definitely a bit confusing as far as wha'ts happening but with a little editing you can really make this fanon interesting. A good way is to add more description and emotion in the chapters to help bring the characters and story to life. The idea of a "broken cycle" is good and different than most fanons. I think you have a good start, just add more life to the story! -- The lucky mango 19:55, April 2, 2013 (UTC)
  • WG works very hard at her fanon and always asks for ways to improve as a writer. It's not hard to see her improvement in the first few chapters of "A Broken Cycle." It's a relatively new fanon. With some more time and fine-tuning I think it has potential. Ty Mako-chao3 Nirvana 20:40, April 2, 2013 (UTC)
  • I agree with the majority of the points noted above. Even though this fanon has potential, key aspects need improvement. Grammar, style, and editing are all areas that, with augmentation, can make this fanon great. The idea behind the story - a broken Avatar cycle - is quite creative; it does indeed have ample potential, but that can't be reached as of yet. I believe that you put effort into your writing, and that is the first step in becoming a well-known author. My recommendations are as follows: find a good editor, add length to the chapters, and most importantly, take your time. I've written a chapter recently for my fanon, read through it, and scrapped it because the plot didn't flow well. I'm focusing on the little things this go-around, so I can make sure it is up to par. With adjustments like these, this fanon could go from a title in a list, to a gallery on the home page. ByBray (Parallel β™‹ Inheritance) Tenzin-chao1 21:39, April 2, 2013 (UTC)
  • The chapters are fairly short right now. A fanon doesn't have to have really long chapters to be good, but this is pushing the lower limit of chapter length. The events of each are enough to make a chapter out of, with some more details, background and description. Physical and emotional description is really lacking where it could be (action description is also good, but there isn't much action yet.) Especially where Han found out she was an Avatar but didn't even know she was a bender before. That easily could've had more details (what are these strange men doing in my house? humor at the character having been picked on by benders for being a non-bender in the past and now she's more powerful than any of them, so what would she do to them if she saw them now? etc.) And, forgive me if I'm wrong, but it seems like you haven't thought ahead much and all you really have now is the premise of the story, which is the two Avatars. They've both found out they're the Avatar and they've met. That's pretty much it. We haven't heard anything of the "evil spirit" or what it's beef with the Four Nations is. It'd also be nice to see how the two Avatars feel about there being another Avatar and what relationship, if any, they'll have, other than their initial shocked reaction, which doesn't count. --AvatarRokus Ghost (Message me β€’ Read my fanon) Aang Cosmic Toph-DoBS-2 14:02, April 9, 2013 (UTC)

Changing Fates

  • Changing Fates is a well-written fanon. It has high writing quality and an interesting story line. Mango is a really talented new author, and I have great expectations. Ty Mako-chao3 Nirvana 22:06, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • When we hear people talk about those undermined authors, Mango is one of the few that come to mind. The way she writes is like a movie playing through my head. Ever since she started this fanon, I've followed it up to its current standing. It's very well-written, and I see true potential in Mango. Lovely story, please keep up the great work! ByBray (Parallel β™‹ Inheritance) Tenzin-chao1 22:42, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • I've only read a bit of Changing Fates, but it is fantastic fanon. The plot is very original, the emoitons are real, and the characters already seem like they will develop greatly over the course of the story. The main page is very well done and catches your eye, which makes people want to read the story. Overall, so far Changing Fates is a hidden gem that people need to find. Appa-dobs1HenryJh 98 (Blogs β€’ FOTH β€’ Parallel)Appa Sprite 22:56, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • After reading the chapters, I think that this fanon has a great premise, and really left me wanting to know what happens next.Β  I noticed that the dialogue and description wasn't just everyday and bland, but truly let me get a sense of what was going on in the characters' heads. Great job so far.

TheLoKnessmonster Sokka-sprite 23:04, May 8, 2013 (UTC)

  • The fanon is well written, good story-line, and great character development through the story. This fanon writer is a great person himself, making it a great connection between the story and the writer. Another thing I noticed is how well the main page designed, very appealing which makes people to read(fact: It made me to read). the writer indeed worked hard on his fanon to make it the best it possibly be. It definitely receives a 10 out of 10 rating from me. Yangchen-spriteUnnamed AirbenderAang-end-c1 (Message Me Β· Read my fanon) 00:05, May 11, 2013 (UTC)

Moon Drops

  • Moon drops is well written and has an intriguing premise. I find it's a little hard to follow at first, although that could just be me, but after I read a bit more the story clicked into place. I like the way Kugumi portrays the conflict between the avatar's duty to the world and personal happiness. Keep it up!

TheLoKnessmonster Sokka-sprite 18:04, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

  • The writing quality of Moon Drops is outstanding. I also love the way Kugumi portrays Asami. I've never come across an idea like Moon Drops, and I can't wait to see how it turns out! Ty Mako-chao3 Nirvana 18:27, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  • I love Moon Drops becuase it takes the theme of self-sacrifice and truly plays it out in a way that a kids' show can't. We see Korra making such a hard choice because it is necessary, regardless of love or opinion. The writing is immaculate and should be an inspiration for many writers here on the Fanon Portal, me included. I do admire how she portrays the characters, while different in some aspects, they are still believeable and you sympathize with them. All-in-all, this is a very well-rounded fanon that has great writing, great story, great characters, and it takes long enough that you are begging for the next chapter... - The Snowbold (wall β€’ contribs) 06:39, May 20, 2013 (UTC)
  • I personally found Moon Drops to be a great read. The writing is highly sophisticated, and Kugumi certainly knows her synonyms! At times I found both the characters of Korra and Mako to be slightly OOC - he may be a jerk, but he's not cruel - I doubt he would completely ignore her, but then again, I doubt she would have made the descision she did. I sort of imagined Korra to be more like Kanna, and not giving in to people because its what they want. She's a strong, independent woman, dammit! Added with the fact that she is the Avatar, tying herself to a loveless marriage to appease only the Water Tribes didn't seem like something she would do - especially not before contacting Aang, or even Kuruk. That all being said, you sort of forget about it as you delve into the story. You have to jump in with an open mind, but after several paragraphs this falls by the wayside as her writing pulls you in. Frui (🌹 β€’ 🐝 β€’ 🐝🐝) 11:08, May 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • I just love all of the pictures! And the intricacies of character you describe in Asami and Mako's relationship was really great to read. Kudos. I know you've probably heard it before, and it probably doesn't make a difference, but keep on using that great talent of yours!Jtwin1 (wall β€’ contribs) 10:54, May 27, 2013 (UTC)jtwin1

Avatar: Neo Revolution

  • I haven't read Neo Revolution, but I've heard great things about it. It's definitely on my reading list for the summer. I do know the writing is high quality and the author puts a great amount of effort into the story. It's one of the rising fanons on the wiki for sure Ty Mako-chao3 Nirvana 15:55, June 24, 2013 (UTC)
  • I haven't read much of Neo Revolution but I like the dire stakes and the sad situation that befell Lyn. Writing could use some work, but who doesn't? I think it has potential. The Snowbold (wall β€’ contribs) 19:33, July 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Neo Revolution is awesome, and I'm glad to have the pleasure to have read it. Every now and again, the descriptions would get a bit lengthy, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but if it occurs too much it begins to take away from the story. But the story itself is original and creative. The action is well-written and the organization is well thought out. It's a great fanon and I believe it's capable of much more in the future. Keep on writing, focus on some characterization, and make sure you don't get too crazy with descriptions where it has no need. Keep up the good work. ByBray (Parallel β™‹ Inheritance) Tenzin-chao1 20:34, July 18, 2013 (UTC)

The Kyoshi Chronicles

  • Kyoshi Chronicles is an extremely well-written fanon with a great cast of characters, featuring Avatar Kyoshi as the main heroine. Kyoshidude is an impressive author who puts in quality effort into each of his chapters, and it shows. This fanon offers some of the best descriptions and emotions on the Wiki. I love how the author can vary the tone of the story in a balanced combination of light and drama. It's definitely worth reading, guaranteed. Ty Mako-chao3 Nirvana 02:35, September 30, 2013 (UTC)


  • An absolutely gorgeous story, I love the depths of the emotion in this story. It is not so much the characters' actions, or the plot, that drive the story, but rather how the plot affects the characters, and their response to the external influence. It isn't particularly introspective, and the words themselves aren't especially emotive - no, it's how Sparkstoaflame binds each and every aspect together to create, quite frankly, one of the most beautiful stories it has ever been my pleasure to fall in love with. Frui (🌹 β€’ 🐝 β€’ 🐝🐝) 03:41, November 27, 2013 (UTC)

Republic City Noir

  • I, Steph32597s, love Republic City Noir. The idea of the dark side of Republic City is intriguing and offers endless opportunity for creativity. The stories are very interesting and, as the name of the collection suggests, dark. I also enjoyed the open invitation to write a fanfiction for the collection. It was super easy to enter. Iluvcinderella responded to my entry right away and it was up on the Fanon Portal the next day.--Steph32597s (wall β€’ contribs) 20:17, January 6, 2014 (UTC) Steph32597s