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- I like this fanon, in general. Post-war. But, this fanon has too mild with only 5 chapters. Too much to called a short Series, too mild to called long stories. Acer Indonesia Ask anything about fanon! • TCA:TFF 12:45, July 3, 2012 (UTC)
- It has the makings of a good story. I'd work on making the dialogue scenes more believable between the characters, though. It's generally good to plan those scenes out and envision them before actually writing them, especially with canon characters. --AvatarRokus Ghost (Message me • Read my fanon) 19:03, July 5, 2012 (UTC)
- The story is good, and it has the motive to keep on getting better. However, plot and writing details do need to be developed. I like how the author uses from The Promise, but there is a thing as too much using. Writing can be a little choppy, however. All in all, I will continue reading this fanon, as it is pretty good. RuleroftheBisons97 07:44, July 7, 2012 (UTC)RuleroftheBisons97
- This fanon needs a lot of work in terms of grammar and clarity. I tend not to bring up technical problems except in cases like this where they make the story difficult to read. The author would benefit a lot from an editor or beta reader, becaue as it is I stuggled so much to read the story I couldn't focus on the content. There's not a lot to discuss with just two chapers anyway, but I did pick out a few things I liked, like how it switched between different viewpoint characters. That reminded me of A Song of Ice and Fire a little bit. I also liked the foreshadowing of Sokka and Zuko's visions, but again, this is so hard to read I doubt I'll follow it long enough to get to the payoff for that. manzai (wall | contribs) Fanon: | 03:29, July 15, 2012 (UTC)
- A new fanon, with two great writers, I doubt this fanon will be inactive. ;) I'll talk about the first chapter. Chronicles about an earthbender who won against Fire Nation, with a lot of famous here and there, but suddenly a dark figure came. Interesting, though, the story is quite confusing. Where, what's happen, and some important information that make readers knew was missed. Just like.. Where is the story take place? Who's Mr. Beifong? etc. For the main idea, it's quite interesting for Yangchen's earthbending master... I like it overall. Acer Evan Seek anything about fanon! 12:42, August 10, 2012 (UTC)
- Dancing Shadows is a good fanon, really. But, unfortunately, it has nobody on readers section, and looks like slightly inactive. My advice to Dancing Shadows is start the writing again, keep it up. Acer Evan Seek anything about fanon! 03:32, August 21, 2012 (UTC)
- I read this fanon some time ago and still remember how much I enjoyed it. I personally love the dark themes it incorporates and the new kind of abilities associated with the Death God. Only thing I might mention is that the author could go more in-depth about how those powers work, such as their origins or any kind of physical movements associated with them. But I encourage everyone here to read this! You won't regret it. --Minnichi 03:48, September 5, 2012 (UTC)
- TLAT is an interesting fanon with interesting plot and twists between each chapters. I enjoyed the series, really, but... cereal? A few features, just like cereal and school are decreasing the beliavbility scores. I promise it'll be better if kuzonkid7 giving a good touch in Book 2. Advice to kuzon, you're good at writing, and you've placed Minnichi in right place as editor. Your editor team will be a good team if you bring Minnichi, as she's mastered at grammars and writing. Good job. Acer Evan Seek anything about fanon! 02:39, September 22, 2012 (UTC)
- I've had the pleasure of reviewing this fanon recently and know it thoroughly because I did, but I encourage someone else to offer their thoughts here so I don't have to appear twice on the list :P Anyway, I'll just point out to readers that this fanon is a lot more complex than it appears at first, so stick to it if you start. I actually became upset at the insane treachery that took place (shows that the author's crafted it well!) and you can probably still see evidence via my raging comments in the chapters. If you're driven away solely by grammatical mistakes or comma issues, I honestly don't consider you a true fanon reader; it's called "Fanon," not "Glorious Grammar." :) This is not story you should pass for any reason! --Minnichi 04:59, September 28, 2012 (UTC)
- I think it'll be great if I win three of these contest. XD
No.. No.. No.. No... I mean; I like the story. RoftB97 gave us an interesting tale about the Avatar's background, by adding some future-Avatar candidates. It's not a bad story, really. I like them most. But one thing that annoying me; update! The story will be an epic if RoftB97 update the story more often, and remake the fanon main page, so it looks like more attractive. You can be an awesome writer; if you also give us more details on here and there (behind the dialogues) Acer Evan Seek anything about fanon! 09:02, September 28, 2012 (UTC)
- I read the first couple chapters. The writing is excellent, with some minor flaws, but the realistic dialogue makes up for it. RoftB97 sheds light on unmentioned background in Aang's story with interesting ideas and theories. The plot is raw and has great potential. More character depth would be nice..... easier said than done XD Ty Nirvana 01:24, October 3, 2012 (UTC)
- Hi again! Don't let me or Acer be the winner, guys. There're plenty of others who are yet to be glorified here with epic userboxes. Now about this fanon, what stood out to me most was the creativity. If I were to review LoK itself, it would get a deduction for believability when it comes to the Equalists, because they're so darn powerful kind of easily with no good explanation. But this author has actually filled in that little plot hole by crafting a very organized and believable system of Equalist training. I loved her approach to chi-blocking in particular (well hey, what's a good title without a good backup?) This fanon deserves all the attention it and get and definitely won't let you down. Go for it! --Minnichi 18:43, October 6, 2012 (UTC)
- Heyheyhey, fanon-folks! As Minnichi has stated, don't let us win... If one of us win, it should counts as cheat! Going to draw my thoughts about CB, I like how ATFF writes the story. At the first heading, ATFF always put the "how-to-spell" the characters, and it will be the easiest way to reader for know and understand the characters. On the content quality, if this count on a review, I will give ATFF 9.0 for creativity, 8.2 for believability, and 8.7 for interest-level. An airbender, the "ancient" bender, has joined Equalists? It's interesting, really creative, and I haven't meet any stories like that, guys. If ATFF wants an explosion of readers, I advice to you, ATFF to gives some "touch" to the main page, which currently doesn't show the epic. But the story is an epic, really, just remake the main page so people can have a interest to your fanon. Acer Evan Seek anything about fanon! 02:16, October 7, 2012 (UTC)
- Chi-Blocker is one of the most original fanons I've ever read. I will never understand how ATFF managed to think of such a complex story that transcends time periods. The writing is great, though ATFF can improve with descriptions and making the audience feel immersed instead of "telling" the story. Chi-Blocker is an amazing story, but the one miniscule area of concern is character development. I feel like Akari didn't really ruminate the magnitude of chasing after her sister. The epicness of her undertaking felt a little nonchalant. ATFF could have tied our hearts to Akari a bit more with a realization of what she could be losing. Other than that, Chi-Blocker is far and away a must read fanon. Ty Nirvana 16:16, October 14, 2012 (UTC)
- One of the most well-written fanons on the wiki. This piece of work has everything that LoK is missing. 'Nuff said. --Minnichi 16:07, October 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Come on guys, fight us! Compete with us! I can't say anything except excellent work to Aritiane. Acer Evan Seek anything about fanon! 10:51, October 23, 2012 (UTC)
- I can wholeheartedly say I'm a Phan of everything Aritiane has accomplished in this story. Phantoms delves into a deep mysterious plot revolving around the events following the LoK season finale. With references to philosophy, government, and psychology, Aritiane weaves a twisting tale that pulls you deeper and deeper. The heroes of team avatar are shown as flawed human beings like the rest of us, struggling with inner turmoil as they try to make sense of the world. My favorite part is the metaphor of Pai Sho in which the game mimics life and people are the pieces. I can't wait to see what else Aritiane has in store in this brilliant game of deception. I've honestly never read a fanon quite like this Ty Nirvana 13:23, November 2, 2012 (UTC)
- I've only read the first chapter and part of the second, but I can already see Aritiane's great writing style. I am glad this fanon was featured. It gives me some amazing reading to look forward to now that Energy Saga's finished up.
TheLoKnessmonster 18:42, November 2, 2012 (UTC)
- I've read Humble's stories since the beginning and I've seen her grow and mature as a writer. She has always paid attention to detail; her descriptions are vivid and beautiful. In Helping One Another, she explores the minds of different characters in great believablity. My favorite piece of writing so far is when a young Asami attends her mother's funeral; she sees so much grief around her, but she retains her innocence as as child. Anyone who reads this fanon will be blown away by the way Humble can effortlessly portray a character. This collection of stories and writer have so much potential, and the sky is the limit. I have nothing but praise :) Ty Nirvana 23:25, November 17, 2012 (UTC)
- I wrote mine in my sandbox here. WaterbenderTaikai (Marionette · Parentless) 05:33, November 23, 2012 (UTC)
- I like the idea of having many short one-shots that take place during the series. I think they're just a little on the short side, but I really can't complain because a) I know how hard it is to make a long story and b) because I know how the rest of the episodes go. I'd say my favorite chapter is the one about Pabu, because it expands on a character that we really can't know too much about. The other ones were also great though. TheLoKnessmonster
- I am an editor of this fanon and I love it. Humble is great ant crafting her stories and really deserved to be FFA for Nov.. It is as good as EoL IMO. I am full of praise but I wish she could make it onger. I really do wish they were longer. Srijay K - TechFilmer 06:11, December 1, 2012 (UTC)
- I used to be a subscriber for this fanon and I have to say it is very thoroughly written. KD does a good job of describing where Kyoshi is and as applause from me for outlining the entire thing. However his small things like choosing to use Calibri rather than the deafualt wiki font just makes it a bit tougher to read. Srijay K - TechFilmer 14:16, December 7, 2012 (UTC)
- The Kyoshi Chronicles is a really great fanon written by an amazing author. It goes into great detail, descriptive action scenes, and a perfect balance of humor, adventure, and all of the other genres. While certain circumstances has delyaed me from reading this, it caught and reeled me back into its amazing story. The only criticism I can give is the font size. Also, the somewhat confusing plot and many minor characters. Still, I hope the story succeeds and grows to an amazing one. RuleroftheBisons97(Fanon) 01:42, December 8, 2012 (UTC)RuleroftheBisons97
- Besides the excellent writing, I was most impressed by how Kyoshidude expanded Avatar Kyoshi's personality. There wasn't much to go by in the show, but the fresh take on Kyoshi puts a refreshing spin on her character and adds multiple dimensions to her personality. I'm also a fan of the main antagonist, Nero. There's so much more to praise, but doing so would give it away: Read it!! Ty Nirvana 15:44, December 15, 2012 (UTC)